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Old 17th December 2010
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"Cerita Pendek" yang sangat pendek ya ndan
Betewe .. Nice try
cuma kalo boleh saya kasi masukan, coba dimasukin inti cerita ndan, misalnya : karena Mario adalah anak baik / giat belajar / suka menolong sesama / atau berjiwa sosial yg tinggi, oleh karena itu dia bisa berhasil dan dibantu orang tuk dapat beasiswa, dll
Jadi biar ada kesimpulan dan inti cerita yg didapat pembaca dari cerpen anda cuma sekedar masukan ndan
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